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The Unexpected - Anna McNair - 26 Aug 2010
From the writer of Punkista,LVL,Amy’s life and Sweet Memories.
THE UNEXPECTED
Daniel,Ronny,Michel,Lexy,Alex,Louis,Chris and Chantelle
![[Image: theunexpecteeeddthing.jpg]](http://i463.photobucket.com/albums/qq359/anamariahriscu/theunexpecteeeddthing.jpg)
see the full size of the photo and the characters description here: http://theunexpectedd.tumblr.com/post/1015460462/characters
The Plot:
8 students at the Art Institute in Boston live in the same apartment on a crowded street.They start they’re second university year in september but things are getting out of control as they’re trying to express themselves.Friendships are almost forgotten,betrayal and broken hearts.When life gives you the unexpected,revenge is your best weapon.
Please note: The characters and the action are pure fiction.The fic is wrote in english.
Astept parerea voastra in ceea ce priveste caracterele si plotul.Va rog sa postati comentarii de mai mult de 2 randuri,fara chestii gen "super.next".Voi pune continuarea dupa cel putin 4-5 comentarii.
ˆˆCopyright 2010 The Unexpected by Ana Maria Hriscu.Do not re-write,sell or copy the content of this fan-fic without my written permission.
Re: The Unexpected - Matt I. River - 26 Aug 2010
De ce am impresia ca.. deja stiu fic-ul acesta? A, da, stiu Pentru ca.. am vazut un fiilm in genul asta Si pentru ca.. mm.. nu, doar atat. Sau stai Am citit si doua romane, tot pe tema asta Deci.. e clar ca o sa imi placa =]]
Asa, sa o luam usor Titlul.. "The Unexpected".. foarte bine ales, desi pare putin.. banal, la prima vedere Acum, nu mi-o lua in nume de rau Nu o spun cu rautate >
Oricum, imi place Mai departe.. Personajele Sunt chiar.. simpatice Sa inteleg ca toti opt stau in acelasi apartament? o.O Ce tareee =]]]
Si in final, dar nu in cele din urma.. "The Plot" Suna chiar foarte promitator.. Si cum.. intr-un fel, imi plac lucrurile de genul.. Sa te astepti la comentarii din partea mea Nu o sa fiu rau, promit
3 Ah, era sa uit Este scris in Engleza Un motiv in plus sa spun tare si raspicat ca o sa fie un fic foarte bun O sa fie, da?
Pai.. cam atat pentru moment Soo.. dupa inca 3 comentarii, next?
PS: Sper ca.. nu am exagerat
Re: The Unexpected - Alice Morris - 26 Aug 2010
Am citit si eu si ce pot sa zic inafara ca imi place idea dar 8 persoane intr'un apartament nush dc, dar ma face sa ma gandesc la Tila Tequila cand dormeau nu stiu cati intr'un pat dar sa trecem peste asta imi place mult cum ai incheiat, "revenge is your best weapon" suna promitator pot sa pun pariu ca o sa imi placa ficul asta si mia ales ca e in engleza, eu ador limba engleza in scris ca in scris, dar dak o mai aud si cu accent engezesc, vorbita de un englez dragutz 8-> oricum, abia astept sa citesc primul capitol
Re: The Unexpected - Anna McNair - 27 Aug 2010
Multumesc mult pentru comentarii,chiar apreciez ca ati scris mai mult decat "super tare.next" sau "super naspa.next" >
<Sincer lucrez la ficul asta din iulie si sper sa iasa ceva pe masura asteptarilor voastre..voi pune capitolul de pe-acum avand in vedere ca nu e asa mult de comentat fiindca am pus doar descrierea si chestii
Season 1.
Episode 1
September.
The summer sun shined and the party lasted all night long but now it was time to get back to Boston, to reality.
“Where shall I put all my luggage? I did loads of shopping and I don’t think they’re all going to fit in my closet.” Said Lexy laying on her comfortable bed
“Oh, I know what you mean.” Said Michel looking helpless at all her bags and stuff she bought from California this summer. They’re room wasn’t big enough for all of them, she thought nodding.
“Heeey, You guys are back!” Said Ronny when she wide opened the room’s door “How was California? Your sunburn looks great!” She continued enthusiastically then looked at Michel and put a fake smile on her face “You too, darling!”
“Thanks Ronny!” Said Lexy then got up and hugged her friendly “Tonight, girl’s night out!”
“Certainly! He have to get all together and have a laugh-between girls” Said Ronny “Call you later ok?” Then she left waiving at the both of them
“Can’t wait to tell them about my summer romance..”Said Lexy looking through the window and smiling to herself “We actually had a lovely time” She concluded then turned to Michel who was looking down, thoughtfully.
It wasn’t an actual summer romance. It was more sex on the beach. Romantic, indeed. Michel suspected he has chosen the beach because he couldn’t afford booking a hotel room.
“What’s wrong honey?” Said Lexy in a sweet tone walking towards Michel
“It’s just..I am really tired after the flight..”
“I know..i know” She said nodding to herself. “I bet it’s hard to be normal near Ronny after what she did to you”
Michel raised her head and looked at Lexy with tears in her eyes.
“You don’t Lexy.It hurts..really bad” She said then put her face in her hands
“Do you still love him?” Said Lexy with an unreadable expression on her face
“Was Ronny here?” Chris came in the doorway looking at them
“Y-yes. But she left a minute ago” Said Lexy then he left nodding in a thanks-a-lot way.
***
“Dude, can you believe it? Summer’s gone, university again.” Said Danny while watching himself in the mirror- his new t-shirt printed with graffiti looked great on him“I have to say, it passed so quickly!” Said Alex checking his phone
“I mean, yesterday- partying hard ‘till the sun raised , today-preparing myself for the fucking routine, exams and everything.” He said laughing then took his eyes off his reflection in the mirror and looked at the other side of the room where Alex stood concentrated on his phone. “What’s the matter, dude?”
“Umm, just thinking. You’re damn right. Another weekend and we’re fucked” Said Alex shoving his phone deep inside his jeans pocket
“Alex, did you order pizza?” Shouted Louis from the corridor.
“Mate, I love this t-shirt” Said Danny nodding slowly, smiling charismatically at his reflection in the mirror.
“I’M COMING!” Alex shouted then laughed at Danny and left the room.
***
“Aw, I have no idea what should I wear” Said Chantelle looking thoughtfully at her collection of cocktail dresses.“Something fresh, but not too extravagant. Mysterious but not too dark” Said Ronny doing her make-up in front of the mirror. “Lexy and Michel came like an hour ago from California”
“Red always goes great with girls nights out” Concluded Chantelle taking a nice dress out of her closet
“We’re going to Lucca. Never been there but I heard the food is absolutely lovely” Said Ronny seeing that Chantelle wasn’t interested in any gossip about Lexy and Michel’s returning to Boston.
“What are the boys doing tonight?” Asked Chantelle looking for some shoes to match her dress
“Getting drunk before the stress starts then goes on for another year?” Said Ronny laughing
“Here you are!” Said Chris grateful then entered the room and kissed Ronny “How is it going?”
“Oh, we were just talking about tonight” Lied Ronny
“I see” Said Chris knowing this won’t help they’re conversation
“How about you babe?” Asked Ronny sweetly then kissing him again
“I’m looking forward to go to the game with Louis” He answered then looked at Chantelle who was surrounded by multi coloured pairs of shoes, unable to decide which one to wear
Everything got so boring between him and Ronny. Simple, meaningless conversation and loads of sex. That was the thing that kept them together, thought Chris standing there, next to her unable to say a word because it had no sense anyway. It was like talking to his grandmother.
“Lovely darling!” She said continuing putting make-up on
“Okey then. We..see each other later” Said Chris then kissed her again and left the room. Her lips tasted like liquorish, nice but dangerous. She was more then a pretty face with an extreme sensuality. And it was better to stay alert or she might bite. Hard.
***
“Ready to go?” Michel asked Lexy who was still straightening her hair.“Sure..right..now” She said taking her purse quickly. “You look really pretty..” She said smiling looking at Michel’s formal but sexy blue dress.
“Thank you” She said shyly “You too” Then she took her phone out “They’re waiting outside..I just received a text from Chantelle”
They went down the stairs on their expensive high heels and out of the building into the early autumn breeze and the night sky full of stars.
Outside, Ronny and Chantelle we’re waiting for them.
“Hey guys!” Said Chantelle hugging them “We are terribly sorry but we couldn’t manage to get a cab to get us to Lucca..”
Lexy and Michel were staring at Chantelle expressionless
“Buuuut…we thought a limo wouldn’t be that bad!” Said Ronny then a You-Did-It-Again expression came on their faces then laughed.
“This way ladies..” Said Chantelle then they crossed the street and a few meters away stood a white shiny limo. White leather covered the comfy sofas and in front of them , 4 glasses we’re waiting to be filled in with the chilled champagne next to them.
“For a year full of..unexpected!” Said Ronny raising her glass and everyone along with her giving a big cheer while the limo made her way to the restaurant.
You said it,girl.
Re: The Unexpected - Alice Morris - 27 Aug 2010
Imi place mult capitolul si se anunta a fi interesant imi place ca e scris in engleza, si acum imi dau si eu seama cat de bine trebuie sa vorbesti engleza ca sa poti sa scrii asa ceva
Anna McNair Wrote:“Certainly! He have to get all together and have a laugh-between girls"Aici nu ar fi trebuit sa fie "we"
altceva nu am ce comenta, doar ca imi place foarte mult cum conturezi personajele, chiar daca nu le descrii, dar iti dai seama imediat ce fel de persoane sunt, prin comportament, atitudine, replici, si evident ca felul in care scrii, nu doar ca se ridica la asteptarile cititorilor, ci le depaseste e foarte tare, am mai zis nu oricum, nu scapi de clasicul
astept next'ul
Re: The Unexpected - Matt I. River - 27 Aug 2010
Mai sa fie. Dar stiu ca stii [=))] engleza. Foarte bine, chiar foarte bine Ma gandeam sa comentez in engleza.. daar.. avand in vedere ca nu ma impac deloc cu verbele [ei, nici chiar, dar.. nu e de ajuns
] o las pe alta data. =]] Soo.. Chapter one.. or.. Episode one.. And.. Season? o.O Are you kiddin' me? =o Cam cate capitole are fiecare sezon? Si cate sezoane sunt? Si acum, parca vad ca spui: 5 sezoane, 25030 de capitole fiecare o.O =]] Mai ceva ca serialele alea de pe Tvr1 sau HBO
Oke.. deci.. capitolul 1.. Care se numeste.. "September"? Sau aia face parte din capitol?
Sunt cateva parti care mi-au placut in mod special
Anna McNair Wrote:“Can’t wait to tell them about my summer romance..” Said Lexy... It wasn’t an actual summer romance. It was more sex on the beach. Romantic, indeed. Michel suspected he has chosen the beach because he couldn’t afford booking a hotel room.
Deci.. Faza asta.. e pur si simplu.. extraordinara "He has chosen the beach because he couldn't afford booking a hotel room." FAIL .. ; )) Plus ca imi aminteste si de o discutie cu o prietena Legata tot de tema asta.. cu.. hotelul, nu cu sex on the beach :-s =]]]
Anna McNair Wrote:“Dude, can you believe it? Summer’s gone, university again.” Said Danny while watching himself in the mirror - his new t-shirt printed with graffiti looked great on him.
Imi place tricoul =]] No, pe bune Sa il intrebi, cand ai ocazia, daca nu vrea sa facem schimb 8-> Ii dau un hanorac
![[Image: 04042009DSC_0305.jpg]](http://www.originals.ro/images/04042009DSC_0305.jpg)
Asemanator, doar ca are fermoar =]]]
Anna McNair Wrote:“Mate, I love this t-shirt” Said Danny nodding slowly, smiling charismatically at his reflection in the mirror.
Like I said.. =]]]]] Schimb, schimb =))
Anna McNair Wrote:Everything got so boring between him and Ronny. Simple, meaningless conversation and loads of sex. That was the thing that kept them together, thought Chris standing there, next to her unable to say a word because it had no sense anyway. It was like talking to his grandmother.
Dur.. Am spus ca Prologul mi-a dat impresia ca am citit ceva asemanator, ei bine.. Cap. 1 mi-a confirmat acest lucru Deci poti sa pariezi ca o sa fiu un fan infocat al fic-ului tau =]] Asta daca nu ma loveste o boala sau ceva.. Sii.. de ce am spus asta? Habar n-am :-j =]]
Anna McNair Wrote:Her lips tasted like liquorish, nice but dangerous. She was more then a pretty face with an extreme sensuality. And it was better to stay alert or she might bite. Hard.
=]]] Mrr..
3 Nebunatico ;; ) .. =))Anna McNair Wrote:White leather covered the comfy sofas and in front of them , 4 glasses we’re waiting to be filled in with the chilled champagne next to them.
“For a year full of..unexpected!” Said Ronny raising her glass and everyone along with her giving a big cheer while the limo made her way to the restaurant.
Nu pot sa inteleg de ce imi place asa mult aceasta parte Pur si simplu.. cred ca modul incare este scris.. face ca totul sa fie.. nici nu stiu.. real? Interesant? Cred ca ambele
Primul capitol este excelent. No, pe bune Dialogul, pasajele in care descrii anumite lucruri sau amintiri.. Totul. Sii.. cum am spus si in primul comm, cel de la prolog, faptul ca este scris in engleza este un motiv in plus pentru acre acest fic merita citit.
Asa, cum.. e bine sa spui si o vorba rea printre cele bune..
Aceea observatie ca si Alice. Acolo cred ca era "we" Nu se cuvine sa gresesti [-x [-(.. Mama, ce le scot
Oke, concluzie: Mai bine lasa :-J Ia sa merg eu la bunicu' sa-i cer actele pe casa Next, next..
PS: Scuze pentru emo-uri, din obisnuinta.. Ma ajuta sa ma exprim mai bine Cred..
Re: The Unexpected - Anna McNair - 27 Aug 2010
Hehe va multumesc pentru comentarii
si ma bucur mai ales ca va place.Acolo intr-adevar era "we" am pus "e" in loc de "w",my mistake@matt episodul nu se numeste septembrie.E doar primul cuvant care indica timpul in care actiunea se petrece
si nu stiu cate episoade sunt intr-un sezon..probabil intre 8 si 10 si ps: chiar e dragut hanoracul @alice e adevarat,nu am vrut sa intru in multe detalii in ceea ce priveste descrierile personajelor dinainte sa postez episoadele fiindca ce rost are sa stii deja cum sunt,e mai bine sa-ti dai seama din atitudine,dialog si descriere
Next-ul o sa-l postez in cateva zile,mai astept comentarii
Re: The Unexpected - Alice Morris - 27 Aug 2010
Anna McNair Wrote:am pus "e" in loc de "w",my mistakeDefapt ai pus "h" in loc de "w" e ok mai greseste omul abia astept urmatorul capitol sau mrg, episod
Re: The Unexpected - Matt I. River - 27 Aug 2010
Ah, I see.. Banuiam eu ca nu e titlu, dar vroiam sa fiu sigur
8-10 Episoade.. e bine.. Si.. merci
Al meu are gluga si fermoar pe mijloc, de sus pana jos Dar modelul e acelasi =]]]
Re: The Unexpected - Anna McNair - 28 Aug 2010
Pun si capitolul 2 in avans poate cine stie mai citeste cineva
Episode 2
“…and a bottle of Cloudy Bay Pelorus please” Said Lexy consulting the menu
“So..” Said Ronny looking around the table “Tell me everything!”
“Oh,well..” Said Lexy “We met on the beach and god,he’s so handsome!”
“Did you had dinner somewhere nice?” Asked Chantelle smiling like she already knew the answer
“Umm,not really.That is just too classic!” Lexy replied with an in-your-face smile in Chantelle’s surprise
“Go on” Ronny said as if Chantelle didn’t say nothing.
“ And we had hot sex on the beach! It was just fabulous..every girl’s dream” Said Lexy excited
“Shame it was just a summer thing” Michel said nodding slowly concerned Lexy needed a reminder: Hello,Earth talking!You’re in Boston,California’s over,summer is over.
“Sure” Said Chantelle “But very exciting story indeed” And smiled politely
“Me and Chris had a great time..we’ve been to New York together!” Said Ronny then took a sip of the overpriced wine
“That sound great!” Said Lexy nodding “Did you do any shopping? Me and Michel did LOADS!”
“Darling you know shopping is one of my priorities!” Said Ronny
“Sure it is!” Agreed Chantelle “I can open an entire shop with all the bags I bought this summer!”
“How about you?” Asked Michel “Any holiday romances?”
“Me?” Said Chantelle laughing “Not really…”
“Here are your seafood salads, ladies” Said the waitress smiling politely
“How’s your nan?” Asked Chantelle breaking the silence
“Oh honey she’s good, thanks for asking. She’s thinking of visiting Canada this year” Said Lexy tasting the food
“Oh really?” Said Ronny with an interested expression on her face “I always found Canada a lovely place”
‘Sure you did’ thought Michel looking down at her plate. It was clear that she and Ronny would not be able to maintain their friendship after what happened. Actually, she and Chris we’re on a break, they didn’t broke up. A couple of days later, Ronny burst into their bedroom happier then ever, she and Chris were together. Since then, Ronny looks at her like at an enemy who can attack every second. But in fact Michel is the one that should feel that way.
“What a lovely evening!” Said Chantelle while they were making their way to the limo
“Very nice indeed” Said Michel
“You were so quiet tonight” Remarked Ronny
“Oh, I was just enjoying the food, the atmosphere..” Said Michel with a fake excitement
***
“Hey..” Said Chris standing in the doorway “Hi” Said Michel surprised of his visit “Ronny’s not here, Lexy is sleeping over in hers”
“Is not her I’m looking for” Said Chris entering the room and closing the door behind him.
Michel was sitting on the edge of the bed, wrapped in a towel, her hair wet. He leaned over and kissed her slowly, his hands touching her skin. Michel’s heart was beating fast. He threw the towel on the floor and kissed her breast. He explored her skin with patience then with gentle moves filled her with pleasure. She knew it wasn’t right, but it felt like it is. Michel opened her eyes and suddenly realised she was cold. She quickly covered her bare skin and hurried to the bathroom. A shower, that’s what she needed to make his smell vanish off her skin.
“Michel?” Someone knocked at the bathroom’s door minutes later“Michel are you in there?”
Michel got dressed as quickly as possible then opened the door.
“Hi,Lexy” She said trying not to sound..weird.
“Umm..when did you get up?” She asked
“Not long ago..” She answered “You ok?”
“What is this supposed to mean?” Asked Lexy with her back turned fo Michel.
“W-what?” She asked while drying her hair
“Is..is this an used condom?” She turned to Michel with an I-can’t-believe-this face “What happened?” she raised her voice significantly
“Well..” Michel said with tears in her eyes
“Is it Danny?” Lexy asked angrily
“Of course Not!” Michel said loudly and cross at the thought that Lexy can care just about herself “Why would I?”
“Michel.. I want the truth!” Lexy said coming towards her “You know I’m your friend..” She added after a while seeing that Michel wasn’t answering
“ I can’t!” Michel said with a serious face
“Fine!” Lexy replied looking at her with disgust “It doesn’t matter, I will discover somehow” She said then slammed the door after her.
So many questions came in Michel’s mind. But no one to answer. Why did he do it? Why didn’t she see the condom before she went to have a shower? Why.. why everything has to be like this? Something was certain though, his love was toxic for her.
***
“Hey, gorgeous!” Said Chantelle “Coming downstairs for breakfast?”
In the dining room, Ronny and Lexy seemed to have a laugh while Louis, Alex and Danny were in a deep conversation about football(most likely) and there he was, drinking his coffee next to the boys but he seemed like he was miles away, lost in his thoughts.
“Look who turned up to breakfast finally!” Said Louis in a friendly tone to Michel while she sat down.